Halfway into a pint of chocolate cherry ice cream, she realized it still tasted salty. This would be due to the tears still coursing down her cheeks. "5 hours, 3 minutes and 21 seconds. I should be done crying now!" she wept miserably. The little red light was blinking on the answering machine. She had yet to answer it --- ever since then. "5 hours, 3 minutes and 58 seconds." tears still flowed, unchecked.
The flowers were withered on the floor, the glass vase that had held them lay broken , surrounded by a drying puddle of water. Red drops stained the ivory carpet, and a macrame crimson stain on the wall was a crude imitation of a childs finger paint. The hilt of a letter opener lay broken on the stairs, the blade dug deep into the cherry wood of the banister. The telivision was playing a dramatic soap opera,but she barley herd it. Tears still corsed down her cheeks, and her wrist burned with a pain like wild fire.
I don't really know where i'm going with this, i just let the words kind of come onto the page. I think I know what happened, but it is'nt exactly pretty just so you know********************************** she attempted suicide, but changed her mind because of someone (who wasn't present at the time) and wrapt her wrist up and ate ice cream. I'll tell you now, the character has issues, and that can't be blamed on me, she wrote herself. Or at least thats what i call it. Anyway, I'm open for suggestions as to what will happen next, but I'll have to verify it with the character who, by the way, is probably still crying. Have a good weekend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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good loads of spelling mistakes(sota gloating hehe) on her way to the sink to put away her dish she could bump the answering machine and then the message would play and it was that certain someone with big news(good/bad?) ur goin to kill her off like ur other characters arent u if u do and u want to bring her back she could be like not really dead and she sits up in the coffin at the funeral/wake just suggestions
First of all melanie, it's SORTA, not SOTA. I like your suggestions. She's real werid, in my opinion, and says that she'll go w/ the first one if it means more pain (jeez, i ask for a story and i get an emo lady with some serious issues who rather likes physicall pain--she says it's because it doesn't hurt as much as what's inside, i say she's loosing it. u r probobly thinking im loosing it too, but im not. I always (mostly) have talks and conversations (coughargumentscough) with the characters that bring themselfs to life.) The other part sounds like a dream. Thankie
I like it, it would be a great beginning of a story. ^ ^
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